I have a rather alternative manner to write a sheet, such as the habit of not using ties. You can read more about it here.
So please feel free to adept as much as you want. (I suppose you have the software to do, if not, just ask.)
In this case you could like to change the rhythmic notation, as in measure 2:
In stead of:
To me, the first one reads more easily, but the second one is better because of the right rhythmic pattern in the left hand.
It is a fascinating thing, those rhythmic patterns and how to write them: see No 4 beats or How to save a life
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